Medusa

This is a good point...Ill have to think about how to change that.

Thanks! I'll elaborate more, and I'll get the next part up soon.

Thanks guys, I'll get to the mistakes. I see I made some typos.

Thanks a bunch for checking this out! Um, I know that a house may be condemned for safety reasons, but they can be hangout spots for bums and teens. I ...

May-- like I told someone earlier, this is for a contest, and I underlined the words to show I used them (chosen from a list of words). Otherwise, thanks! --Medusa.

Thank you so much, Kitty. Your crit was extremely helpful. I re-edited my peice, and changed some things, and I'm considering adding plot to make it...make more sense, or something...but ...

Thanks! I made some changes, and I hope it's more accurate now. --Medusa.

Headache is capitalized to put emphasize on the word...I want it to be viewed as a person rather than a thing. Weird, I know. Thanks Saphhire! --Medusa.

I loved Lord of the Flies! I liked the fact that these boys, who seemed so innocent, could be so brutal. The flipside to respectable good-natured children. --Medusa.

That's fine, your comment is appreciated. --Medusa.

I know it's romance...but it seems rather teen-lit-ish to me...I thinka little more flesh on the bones and this could be truly wonderful. Right now, though, it's at just wonderful. ...

The numbers go with the contest rules--the underlined words go with the numbers. Thank you for reading so quickly!

This is most definetly on me "to read" list. As is the Mermaid Chair, by Kidd.

hinterland:a region that is remote from cities or their cultural influence and by "raced on", I mean went on...kept going... Thanks though! --Medusa.

wow...simply beautiful. I did find a couple mistakes though. Four hours of heavy lifting, and she’s finished the stage of arrived. She waits for settles in, but she’s too hopeless ...