MeadowLark

Heya! I read the first three paragraphs, but it sounds very, very interesting! But yet, you should try and fix the paragraphs. It's actually quite confusing and annoying. I also ...

Heya! This is soooo much better than the first time! I hope that didn't sound mean. I didn't mean it like that. You've improved! You have managed to show us ...

Heya! This sounds much better. I really like this story. The MC seems to have a tormented...uh soul. If that sounds right. It's quite different. The whole circus idea is ...

Heya! This was pretty interesting. Let me see what I could point out. First off: I opened my eyes to see two pair of eyes blinking at me. “Oh Renn, ...

This was great! I love your style of writing. Really I do. I like how you described the three types of princesses and how content Princess Carmenita Alexandria Renato is ...

Thank ya for the PM. Just reading this I got the shivers. I didn't notice any info dumping. You explained it all in creepy Zahra's speech. I love how you ...

It reminded me of the Pied Piper. Just the children following the Piper away from their home. I really enjoyed reading this. Of course, I've actually (surprisingly) never read anything ...

This was pretty interesting and amusing. You should post more up. Of course, the spelling mistakes distracted me, but I'm used to reading work with bad grammar and spelling (my ...

Heya Claeren! I thought I'd give a quick review of your story! First off, this was interesting. The MC and plot were well defined. You have my interest peaked. I ...

This was awesome! I really liked it. The idea of everything being so cliched. What a way to fight the cliche! Although, I did confused near the ending. How did ...

This was wonderful! I love this! The idea of letters and pictures coming alive and trading places. Who would have though that the letters that make up our stories were ...

Oh this was pretty cool. I've actually never read anything about anyone getting sucked into a game, but I've heard of them. I liked how the two sisters spoke with ...

Haha! Meep this was awesome! I've never read Twilight but I think it is waaayyy overrated. I find vampires soo boring. I couldn't stop laughing and I think my family ...

Heya Dreamworx! Thanks for the PM. Great chapter! You described Benjamin wonderfully! I should take a page from your book and do that with my work :lol: . The one ...

Haha! Part two yes! Ahem... :oops: I absolutely loved Tarots' and Brands' banters. They were hilarious and made me laugh. No word of a lie! But, like Stella said above, ...