McMourning

Hello! I enjoyed reading it, probably because it wasn't overly romantic. There were some punctuation errors, besides what OFour found. The bus driver began to close the doors but I ...

Hello! It's quite nice, but it isn't filled with quite enough emotions. Personally, I like emotional nonfiction pieces. Scar. You stop me from being who I truly am. Also, since ...

Hello! I enjoyed reading your poem. It hurts to think of you. I never meant to feel this way. These italicized lines can stand together or thrown separately into the ...

Hello! It is certainly unique, and we need that in our world. I writhe into your arms, but your hands are busy with cancerstick s and cardboard. There were several ...

Hello! I really liked rhyming blaze with praise, because it seems that so often we rhyme words with words of the same ending. (Blade with glade not aid, for example) ...

Hello! I applaud your creativity! The first few lines sounded just like a fairy tale, but it turned out differently than I suspected. It's a great piece of fiction, but ...

But time after time Adults seem to accept it For they say after all, It’s only a teenager! Hello! As Claudette mentioned, you could have used more punctuation. In the ...

Hello! I'd call it science fiction, because it deals with the Shards of the Universe. Then, he muttered a short word and placed one last light kiss on my lips. ...

Thanks for the advice! I understand what you are saying. I probably should have included the foreword about Cassie's and Li's relationship. Misty, I do read, 3 books per week, ...

Hello! Chandni has a point about "simple", but there were definitely parts that work well: Drowning in unshed tears Deafened by silent screams Haunted by words never said And chances ...

Hello! I applaud was surprisingly well written, considering you're 16! I've read many short stories by my peers, and they have been nowhere near as excellent as that! I'm sure ...