MaybeAndrew

It’s good, I like the way you really hammer home that it’s a ghost the entire story and we have to figure out she is in denial about her father. ...

It's really good. I love how the Slugs upon close inspection are indistinguishable from humans. This is one of those things you read and everything begins to click into place. ...

That was awesome. I love Lovecraft, and this hits the spot. I really like the parrel with addiction and the demon. Grows when you aren't looking at it, takes you ...

I like it! As the others said, it could do with a few basic grammar edits, but besides that, I think it's great. The only thing I would add is ...