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I loved this. But, what Fuffy said, please do describe Leo a bit more. I still dont really know what he looks like excapt he has different colored eyes and ...

very good. i just read all three chapters straight through and decided to post my opinion here because everyone has done all the criting that i could see. anyway... i ...

Amazing. Simply amazing. I wish i could write like you. All in all, it was a great way to start off a book. I especially liked your prolouge, and i ...

i liked it alot. i agree with Jennafina and all she posted, but i just want to add one thing. She hurriedly stows the egg into a leather drawstring bag ...