Masquerade

Hello. I thought this was an interesting story conceptually, and your writing was pretty good as well. I'll start with some nitpicky things and then talk about the story a ...

Hello. Happy Review Day! I thought this was pretty good overall, but there were a ton of grammatical problems. I've picked out some examples: "The trees weren't exactly lively, it ...

Hi, happy review day! This chapter was pretty good. I skimmed the first one so that I would understand what was going on, though I am still rather confused about ...

Hi, happy Review Day. I'm back for part two. Well, you did a lot better in this chapter of not switching tenses again, though at the end you started switching ...

Hi, happy Review Day! Well I think your writing is pretty good. The piece flowed very well, which was nice. I went back and quickly read your first chapter so ...

Hi, happy Review Day! I'm back for chapter 1. Well I thought this chapter had nice flow, like the prologue. You do a good job of that. Most of the ...

Hello, happy Review Day! I really enjoyed reading this. I take it they're some kind of circus group, and I think that's a really interesting and unusual group to write ...

Hi. Happy Review Day! I thought this was a pretty great first chapter. It drew me write in and you successfully kept up the tension to keep me interested. It ...

Hello, happy Review Day! Well I thought this was a pretty intriguing prologue. Definitely makes me curious about what will happen in the rest of this story. You did a ...

Hi. Happy Review Day! Wow, I thought this was pretty fantastic. You're writing is quite lovely. Your imagery is fantastic. I could really feel this story. I didn't realize it ...

Hi, happy review day! You seem to have an interesting seed of a story here. I agree with MrGreen about it being nice to see a story with a medieval ...

Hi. Happy Review Day! I thought this was a pretty good start. You seem to have a good sense of flow as far as the story itself goes. Here's a ...

Well I would say this was pretty good considering English isn't your first language. There were some words you used of phrases that you mixed up that would indicate that, ...

Wow, well that was an exciting beginning. Your writing style is very colorful and detailed in the right places most of the time. You just drift close to the border ...

Hi FearlessLove4. I like these lyrics. I like how they tell a general story, even though it was very sad. Also I liked how it was both about the mom ...