MaryEvans

Well fix it girlie! Fix it!

You've misspelled Prologue. Also you switch between tenses in the narration. Pick one and stick with it. I wouldn't switch around point of views either but that's up to you ...

Why are they different? What about them differs?

Thank you for the review. Though I think you misunderstood. I don't drastically change style in a story, I am trying a new style in a new story so no ...

Wrong place to post this. Try the forums instead. This is for literary works.

Thank you for the warm review. Yeah there are probably quite a bit of typos I rushed it a bit. I'm revamping it so I wanted to know if the ...

The first if you have a way to make it originial, I am sick of stories about dogs and wolves and packs.

This is more suited for the forums and kind of clutters the green room. I suggest you post this type of thing there in the future. You can even add ...

Thank you for the feedback.

Thank you for the review. You should check out the previous chapters if you are interested in the plot. And if questions still remain I'd be happy to answer them.

Thank you for the review. Will look over the things you pointed out.

Thank you for taking the time to read and review, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Better formating and maybe a bullet point / list system would do wonders for readability. Also, unless you are planning to expand on this, I think it's more suited for ...

Well my main point was that I can't really judge your writing from something old. Most of the things I pointed out you probably solved already. In any case, I ...

By balancing it out with showing. No other way really. Unless you are going for something really stylized, in which case you have a lot to work on. It's just ...