Mars

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I'm not sure why nobody's reviewed this. So I'll have a go. I really cannot comment on historical accuracy; I do vaguely know the story of the Boleyns, but otherwise, ...

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Hello! "I don't know," Jack answered truthfully, "we've never had any previous problems with the water supply. (end quotation marks) droplets [s]the[/s] that had beaded his chin He then turned ...

Hello! I sit on the bench outside the principal’s office. I have already waited for twenty minutes for him to call me in. Apparently, the principal thinks that my attitude ...

Hi! I'm so sorry this took so long, but here goes! Mrs. Epstein had asked me what it signified. Not sure what it really meant myself, I told her that ...

Thing s change and flicker Yup yup. More on that, and the preceding three lines: I don't like the repetition of things . It's a vague enough word to use ...

*tackles* I’ve spread my wings, I’m ready to fly, Why must you stop me one more time, Eek, this line is too long, methinks. It jars the whole flow or ...

I adore you~ they'll pull in the slightest I don't like this. It's because of the they'll - it doesn't really fit, and I also think that present tense (eg ...

Hello, hello! First off - dialogue grammar! Yours is wrong. :-O Don't worry, it's a very common mistake. Basically, instead of "Hello." She said. which is what you have now, ...

black cave to retrieve the treasure within . Many before him had tried, but farther in , the sweet smell of succulent fruit drew him closer. Farther in to the ...

Oh gosh. This was...brilliant. I cringed when I saw that it was a parody of one of my favorite poems, but you definitely kept the form and the tone of ...

Hello, Stoney! Welcome to the site. Let's start this review, shall we? First, make sure all your I's are capitalized, dear! A small mistake but it does make a difference. ...

Tick Tick Tick. The clock rang as the time passed. I looked up and sighed. It was three o’clock , which meant I had another fifteen minutes to dread before ...

Hi Velvet, welcome to the site! You should know that we have a rule here, which is to have two reviews done for every piece you post. This just spreads ...