Mari1901

Hello! First of I wanted to tell you I find you story engaging. I know it is just the prologue, but I do intend to keep reading. You did a ...

Heeey. The length of your story is not problem. Actually, it reminds me a lot of an exercise one of my teachers used to do. It was basically trying to ...

Hey! I liked your story, my only problem with it plot wise is that I would like more of it. Some context. I would love to know the whole thing. ...

Heeey I like it. The style loosely reminds me of Poe. Now, I have an issue with the semicolons in this story. I'm not part of the group of people ...

Heeey! I liked it. You are good with words and making things flow. What I mean it that you have a good technic for writing—there is no doubt about that—but ...

Heeey! This is a very nice story. I can feel the emotion and heart break. The only major problem I see, is he wording. Sometimes you try to use fancy ...

Hey there! First and foremost, you did a nice job with a narration that is primarily in second person. I know how tricky that can be. But if you do ...