ManFromTheSea

Thank you so much for taking the time to look at my poem. I have gone through it, following advice and now I think it is much better. It might ...

The first stanza seems out of place with the rest of the poem. It is a very interesting piece of work though, keep it up!

That is quite short, it does sound like something I have heard before. Try to throw something interesting in there and mix it up a little. Keep writing.

Excellent use of writing however, the structure and actual meaning of the poem remain unclear. There are things to question such as ‘it’ and ‘your’ (who are they) which is ...