Made_In_Demise

I just like tearing stories apart and giving reviews like that. It's called an inline review, where you go after every paragraph and say what you think. I'm really used ...

Thanks for all the reviews/comment things. I really do appreciate it. :D I wasn't really planning to continue the story, though. So, sorry, I suppose. MV, I was worried about ...

Didn't even notice this was updated until today. Anyway, this snippet of Chapter One was incredibly short. If you don't mind, try to lengthen it up. Kind've annoying to only ...