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Re: The Nail Scarred Hand
Hi GAM, I think this started brilliantly and tapered off a bit towards the end. After reading the first few paragraphs I was drawn in and eager to read more, ...
Dec 29, 2009 -
Re: DELETED
Well the first thing I have to say is that I just love the title! I always think a good title is important to stories (it was the reason I ...
Dec 28, 2009 -
Re: To Juddy
This is really incredible. The first and second bits are so sad they nearly made me cry :cry: You have a real talent here - you should think about entering ...
Nov 22, 2009 -
Re: Help me
I really like this, it has a real urgancy about it. I like the first part very much especially the first line. Did God make me imperfect? Did God make ...
Nov 22, 2009 -
Re: you're Not Perfect.
Hi :wink: I think that this is okay, but it needs lots of improvements. I like the beginning when it starts with Jill crying, but I think you should maybe ...
Sep 16, 2009 -
Re: Eternal Secrets Prologue
Hey, welcome to the forums. I agree with a lot of the things the person before me said, and I have a few things myself that I would like to ...
Sep 5, 2009 -
Re: How to Live - Chapter Two
I don't think this was as good as chapter one, but it was still enjoyable. The thing I like about your writing is that you don't overdo it so it's ...
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: Noughts and Crosses sequence
I loved the first three, but the last one was a bit of a disappointment. She didn't intend to write four when she started and I think the series was ...
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: Her Hearts Greatest Fear( Prologue)Rewrite
Hey, welcome to the website :wink: Okay, in my honest opion I think this has potential but needs work. It's a good way to open a story, but I think ...
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: A Return to Peace (Chapter One)
The Good I like! :wink: This was very well written and there were no grammar mistakes as far as I can tell. The characters were interesting enough to keep me ...
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: Seeking Attention Part 1
I think this was interesting and well written. The first paragraph was a little hard to digest, possibly because it was a little too descriptive (if that's possible) but it ...
Aug 26, 2009 -
Re: Amazing Books
1984 - George Orwell To Kill a Mockingbird - Harper Lee Catcher in the Rye - J.D Salinger Wuthering Heights - Emily Bronte Harry Potter - J.K Rowling A Heartbreaking ...
Aug 26, 2009 -
Re: Twilight, New Moon, Eclipse
I think it would have been a thing I would have adored a few years ago, had I read it then. I totally understand why people would love it, people ...
Aug 26, 2009 -
Re: How to Live - Chapter One
Hi Xirenia! This is actually my first review, so we're the same as far as being new is concerned. Let me just say that I really enjoyed this first chapter, ...
Aug 26, 2009
