Maddy

Ash and Em, I love it. :) I believe the hook rockstarz was taking about could easily be communicated throught the tone and power of the voice singing it. And ...

Hey Isha! It's Maddy here, and I'm going to review this. I'd like to start out by saying I thought this piece had potential to be metaphoric. I thought this ...

Hey, Lena! The points you've brought up in this piece were well-explored and communicated. Although it was well-written, I felt at times you were trying to focus on just their ...

Hey emoinpink, I'm maddy, and I'll be your review for today. First off, I'd like to discuss this paragraph: The voyage itself was horrid. We were forced to room together ...

I think we'd both agree you simply can't use the word poke. Bahaha. Anyway, I've revised it slightly so it flows better: He slammed his fist into the wall He ...

Hey cannon, it's Maddy here, happy to return a favour. ;) Okay, so I'll go straight onto your grammar. Nitpicks: So here he was, three weeks later , in Eastbourne. ...

Hey Georgie! Sorry it took me soo long to review this. I've been pretty busy, and now that I seem to have free time, I decided to (finally) finish it. ...

Hey Ellen ;) Going to review this for you. Nitpicks: and treasured those brilliant stars that illuminated the nights sky. Lose the "s" on the end of night sky. all ...

There's nothing grammatical I couldn't find wrong in the one you've attached. Everything's good. You should probably now replace that one with the one you've posted on here ;)

Georgie, you are the bestest, and I very much did just edit all of this. I'll e-mail it to you, seeing as it is in colour and I really can't ...

Great job, Ash. I love your style of writing. It's quirky, and reads well. I feel like I want to write the next installment, just so the story keeps going. ...

The sun was rising over the moor. The horizon bled purple into the sky, then melted into pink, peach and gold before meeting the blaze of white gold sunlight. A ...

Hi Alex, welcome to YWS, seems you're fairly new here. Anyway, onto the review! I'll start with saying you've got a fantastic idea here. I would really like to be ...

Hey austenite, here as you requested. Anyhow, your grammar is fine, which saves me a whole lot of ranting. Hooray :) Things I liked >You're dialogue's fantastic. It flowed really ...

Hey Majic, here as you requested. Seeing as this was fairly alright grammar-wise, and due to the size of the piece, I will not be nitpicking. Plot: Not bad. I ...