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I made a mistake with those last two lines, for some reason I had condemnatilon and salvation with extra syllables. Thank you for pointing that out, I'll just edit in ...

I had a look at Smoke and I agree with all the other people who posted there, it was a lovely, sad story. I think you have a real talent ...

Yes I agree it is a bit cliched and really, the whole story line is a bit predictable. I'll just post chapter one and two (unedited, just so you know) ...

Thanks alot Ofour :) I'm glad you liked it. There should be full stops in those places you pointed out, I'll fill them in now. I did actually mean preyed, ...

Thank you very much, I think that when I wrote it I was trying to, loosely fit it into iambic pentameter. Thanks alot, I'll try and make some additions with ...

I loved the series as well and I really hope Stroud writes some more.