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Re: Mal'Zhurn
The windows rattled like rabid animals in a cage. Brief flashes of lightning lit up the pitch black sky. Gerard turned on his mat, his mind blurred with drowsiness. Only ...
Feb 22, 2008 -
Re: Maqur Isles
This story definitely need more description. In my mind while reading this, I see everything as almost black and white. Also, there are a couple of grammar mistakes. Make sure ...
Nov 16, 2006 -
Re: Twilight City
I loved the mystery and suspence that you create in the story. Also, I think that you did a good job when you jumped out with sudden information that helped ...
Nov 15, 2006 -
Re: The forgotten
This is a pretty good story. Let me just show you a few errors: "Four years had passed since the ancient spell was muttered and changes had come , men ...
Nov 14, 2006 -
Re: The war path
As those other people said before...SPELLING. Sometimes it gets annoying when reading something that has so many spelling errors. Like so: "Bob had too filll in te blak or else ...
Nov 14, 2006 -
Re: Elf Son
Wow... This is really UNFINISHED and really annoying me. Ill tell you why: 1.The only thing that offers ANY information on this main character is the title. -"Elf Son" 2. ...
Nov 14, 2006
