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Very well-researched, well-presented and interesting. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it! There is just one major point to consider, perhaps you could define what a voucher is at the beginning, because ...

Your story is a bit too intense for my liking, I'm sure it is to somebody's taste, but just not mine. The protagonist seems a bit too over-the-top and rambling ...

as the characters here are British adolescents, I feel it is necessary to have them use foul language, because that's typical of us. Haha so true! Sorry, just had to ...

I must admit I have no idea who Cavour and Bismarck are, therefore I would begin this with a description of both men before beginning your essay on them. They ...

Your piece is good in the sense that it is realistic and the characters are presented as believable through their actions and dialogue. This piece definitely has potential, although I ...

She waltzed with pointed toes and pirouettes, Standing so short and with those eyes so bright. Better at once than just blonds or brunettes, I should have known--she claims both ...

Give me weed Pound or two Take out all the seeds and sticks So my head won’t transfix With twisting and twirling And whirling I smoke the most On April ...

I thought it was brilliant! In my opinion that is exactly what a tree would be thinking if he were the last one on Earth! Everything I was going to ...

Seems like you've already had a lot of constructive criticism, and I agree the poem is very interesting. I'm not usually a fan of less subtle poetry from a personal ...

I loved it! You write beautiful prose with wonderful description that really sets the scene and lets the reader lose themselves in your story. There's just a few points I ...

The Summer of the Copper Rose Very nice choice of season name! I know that you don't have to write in the style of the original writer, but from a ...

Very interesting beginning, as someone already said, like Lemony Snicket's writing. Jeff was the mirror image of his father, had his father been a short boy of a young age ...

Which suggestions were you referring to, I mean, everyone has their own opinion, but I just thought you could be more specific. I agree on some accounts, but I was ...

In answer to your poll (I answered 'they're OK'), I think that if only one character has an accent then it can be tolerated, or it has to be done ...

I quite liked the idea of the poem, but I came across a few issues: Alert and alone An eerie wind blown... No eerie wind blown But a gentle breeze ...