Lulu93

This is a good prologue. I think the grammar needs to be looked over again but it seems very interesting so far. However, I think you should elaborate a bit ...

TO start, it's an interesting story line but so very cliche. A pretty girl is not pretty enough to be a popular so she gets made fun of. I think ...

Thank you, like I said it hadn't been proofread so I am very shocked that you didn't find my errors. I definitely appreciate it though. I'll post chapter two soon!

Thank you for the input. I was actually planning on Brooklyn sorta changing throughout the story, as you'll probably see. And the skiing thing, well, I am originally from near ...