Lozrent

you are very welcome, sir, madam, lord, dutchess, lady, knight, i do not know whitch title you go by so i mentioned all i could come up with :P also ...

i have another one that is in first person, and this is supposed to be in third, like with the other 3 that are written like this one.

thank you :D i shall fix it up soon :P ps. i take my inspiration from H.P. lovecraft ;3

Thanks, and I had my friend read through it quickly before I posted it and she also commented on the capitalization problems XD I tend to just write the entire ...

thank you for the feedback. as soon as i actually get another idea for a story ill remember your advice, haha :D

hey, i noticed that a massive block of text could seem threatening. so I've split them up into multiple now at sections where it felt natural, if you do read ...

glad to hear you liked it :D

yeah grammar and puncation is not one of my strong suits, it comes from me always just jotting down my thoughts as fast as possible while listening to music and ...

so far you are probably the most helpfull person on here. thanks for pointing out all the stuff i managed to mis :) also leant is a word :P i ...

Thanks a lot for the feedback, i shall put them into effect immediately :D and now that you mention it I really notice all the stuff you said, thanks for ...

thank you so much and i now hate the spelling checker on my computer considering balde doesnt make much sense in context haha, but seriously thanks a lot for the ...

thanks alot for the review, and yeah, i noticed the sentance structure was a tad on the worse side here. i tend to have a problem with that. and also ...

haha thakns, and by the way i know the feeling of having an awesome idea for something and then when your gonna write it instead of getting a nice flow ...

thank you for some actual helpful advice, ill make sure to try to vary my sentence length and complexity more next time ^^

thanks for the review i wont go as far as saying its very helpful as most of what your saying here is simply going into if im a piece of ...