LowKey

Hey-ho, 200! Sorry for the lateness of this review, was busy with building computers and getting them to work. I'm here now, though, so here we go! They were simply ...

Hullo, Night! Pretty good hook here for a story. I like how you didn't say the word 'vampire' at any point in the prologue, and still got it through with ...

First off: Sorry this so late! Had some issues on my end of the world that soon blossomed into yet more issues. Dragged me way for a bit. In any ...

“Mother!” I shouted! Second exclamation point is not needed. :) Only thing I caught, still looking really good. However, that's a lot of security to put on one person. Which ...

Ooh, very interesting development. I'm liking your characters. Very nice development going on with them. Interested to learn more about these necklaces... very interesting. I do have a question, thoug

I’m back! Looking really good here, I love the descriptions of the characters. Now I know what they look like! Just a couple nit-piks and suggestions, nothing too major that ...

XD I loved the ending. Very nice. There are so many new poets posting in the forum who have the build up, have the build up, and surprise, they get ...

*There is an epic battle of epic proportions and awesomeness. I’m not even lying. There were horses, a man on fire, all kinds of crazy stuff. Suddenly, the heavens split ...

"Morning mom! Morning dad! Morning sis!"said Lief. "Morning Lief!" "Good morning, honey." "Good morning, Lief." "Well, I hope I do well on all these tests today! I've got a test ...

Jeepers, this is short, but no less good, I don't think, than if it were longer. Very interesting... you describe how good she is, how perfect. How everyone likes her, ...

Very nice. Grabs the reader right away, always good, darn near a must. I'm very interested about this World. What is the World, and what's going on there? Who the ...

It is short, but it's very good. Had a slow moment for a bit. "Dear Lucy, from Lucy? Neat..." Luckily, moments only tend to last a moment. Can't find anything ...

I can talk about this! My aunt's actually done stuff like this, and I took a basic genetics class to keep up with her. She actually helped out with creating ...

Hey Kaylyn! Looks like you’ve got a great character. From what we’ve seen, he or she’s interesting. You don’t give out their whole life story in one big info dump, ...

^^ Gotta second, it would be a bit less if it weren't the first part in a bigger story. Assumed it was, but didn't see a "pt 1/ part 1/ ...