LowKey

This is the first time I've ever read a story, or seen anything that fits 'it was so bad, it was good'. Wow. :shock: But it was really, really funny. ...

XD You have got to be kidding me. :lol: Why in the world would anybody want to plagiarize this? Go Aet!

He'll be dead soon. I'd change the bold to 'He'd'. Tense issues. :) Very good way to open up a story, grabbed me from the start and held me through ...

I really liked how you used his name at the ending. I also liked how you started off the story with him as his current self looking back. It roped ...

Mad Hatter -- This is a major improvement upon the piece I read before. Instead of making me annoyed and frustrated, it opened my eyes somewhat. It now resembles a ...

Rhyme scheme: a, a, b c, d, e f, f, g h, h, g This stanza sorta breaks the pattern: You aren’t my “Knight in shining armor, ” And I’m ...

No errors or typos that I could find! :D Very well done. It was comedic and, not being a morning person myself, could relate perfectly. The scene you described pretty ...

Hi, Dove! :shock: Wow. This was... wow. It was interesting. It's not so often I read a story like this, so I think that amplified the effect of it. However, ...

To be frank, all I saw was the effort in their work, which , cancelled out any genius. Get rid of the comma. You don't need it here, unless the ...

Wow. This is only the first part, right? There will be more? Only found one typo, and some thoughts,. Guns tore through his body, and hey lay limp on the ...

This was a pretty good story. Funny, but terrifying, and all in a little over 500 words. That's pretty good. There's always room for improvement, however, so let's get started. ...

Well that was fast. Interesting story idea -- definitely not what I'd expect. Not saying it's not good, because, with some tweaking, it could be great. “Would you marry me?” ...

This is starting to get interesting... Still have errors, but then, who doesn't? They walked together threw the city. Raven lead the way while Ruki followed close behind. Ruki lept ...

Wow -- great idea for a story! I have only one complaint, and that is that it doesn't look like you proof read your work before posting. If you don't ...

Hmmm.... We must know the same guy. In any case, good poem. Nice break from Robert Frost. I like how you kept bringing back the salt dagger. But now that ...