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  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Harp *Edit*

    Wow, this is pretty good! The title was especially appealing to me because I just happen to be a harpist, although very little of this applies to me (being much ...

    Jan 31, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Riptide-chapter 1 please edit :)

    Wow, this was great! I really enjoyed it, and, as far as I could tell, minimal grammatical or spelling mistakes! The only thing I really noticed was the Latin thing: ...

    Apr 7, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Lost Stranger

    Ooh! This is good! Just the kind of fiction that I like! I do hope you write more! Definite promise, really definite! Now.... on to the nitpicks: The girl takes ...

    Apr 7, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: the Tree of Ungit [two paragraphs of the beginning]

    This is looking pretty intriguing! I await more! Okay, on to the critique! Most of all this tree hide history This hide should be hid . no one has ever ...

    Apr 7, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, General Re: Legion of Superheroes: Heartland part 2

    Interesting story going on here! I personally never watched Legion of Superheroes.... but I did recognise some of the names. Okay, I personally didn't see much wrong, except for your ...

    Apr 2, 2010
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Masters, Padawans, and Mysteries- a Clone Wars tale

    All-in-all, good story! You seem to know what you're talking about, which is always a good thing when writing a fanfic. Ok, on to critiques: Jedi Temple, here I come, ...

    Dec 10, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Winged Crossing- Prologue

    Wow, intriguing and stunning!! Sorry, I don't have time for a nit-pick, but I'll just tell you that this is quite a work of art! And this was a dream??? ...

    Oct 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Half-Vampire (No love involved =P) - Quite Violent

    Hiya! Interesting story, this... I'm quite into vampire stuff such as this so logically I had to review it. All-in-all great story! I like how its based in Japan (I ...

    Oct 8, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Looking Glass Curse

    I have to tell you that I am extremely impressed!! (however much that means to you) This story was great!! Well written, well constructed, I could find no error with ...

    Oct 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Missing

    That was a great story! Very well constructed, and it didn't bore me! I just want to know exactly what happened at the end. Are you saying that her best ...

    Jul 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Lithium

    I love this!!! It's really good! The flow of your writing is pretty much unbroken, though at the end you rushed it a teeny tiny bit. Also, the last sentence ...

    Jul 2, 2009
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Twilight : The real story

    Ok, I thought it was funny, only one teeny tiny problem : There was waaaaaay too much swearing!!!!!!! I mean, it's kind of unnecessary. And, believe it or not, some ...

    Jun 18, 2009
  • Script » General, General Re: Author and Character

    Hahahahahaha!!!! *falls off chair in a fit of uncontrollable laughter* Oh my gods, mate, that was bloomin' hilarious!!! You know, it's kinda funny, I do something like that with my ...

    Jun 18, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I know why the caged one...

    Brilliant!! A work of genius!! A masterpiece of this meagre time!!! 'S math sin!! 'S e, 's math sin agus sin!!!!! Wonderful! Loved it! (though there were a few times ...

    Jun 18, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: I Need You To Write. - 7.

    Angels-Symphony said: Emma! Like I've said, and many other people have said, you're a great writer. But there is one thing you need to work on. The plot is too ...

    Jun 15, 2009


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