Lollipopper

Hello, Nike! I enjoyed this piece. Very interesting. There were just a few things that caught my eye. First, was the writing. I felt like you were tripping over your ...

Hello, liviaalexandra. Hmm...this is an interesting piece. I think it is very fascinating, but I found it a little hard to understand at times, like Dragons said, format it into ...

Hello, Teardrop. I think the overall idea of this is very cool. The synopsis really caught my attention! But I think what you really need to work on is description. ...

Thank you for PMing me again! I appreciate it. I am still very much enjoying this! First--I like the Cheshire cat comment. :D Second--I don't know why, but the first ...

Thanks so much for PMing me when you posted this! I appreciate it. Okay, first off...I noticed this chapter seemed to pivot from the idea of the last two. Now ...

Hey, I gotta do this quickly. Let my typing skills come in handy at this moment! I like the story. Just like the first, I liked the idea. But in ...

Alright, so...I liked this. It was interesting and the prologue caught me. But there are a lot of grammatical errors. One--you switch between the past and present views. For example, ...

Hey Forest queen...I really liked this. I've always liked the story of Robin Hood, and the way you brought a new world with his, I really enjoyed this. You were ...

Hello, Dragons. I think that there was a pretty good plot line in this, but the punctuation was horrible. I'm sorry--It was just so hard to understand when sentences went ...

Like Rachel said, this was a very traditional fantasy tale. First off--I love fantasy. That is where my core lies. And second--most people can't resist MORE fantasy. I mean, how ...

Hmm, I think I liked this. There has obviously been some serious work devoted to the story. Overall, I liked it. I think I'm being to picky or maybe it's ...

Ooh, I really liked this. I love how you started it out. At first I was like "whaa..?" but it caught my attention. Then it said that he was playing ...

Whooaah! I don't know if it's too late to say what I need to say...But I REALLY liked this! It was very entertaining and super funny. I really liked the ...

Hey, my name is Sierra! :) I don't do grammatical editing--just overall advice. I think it was pretty good, but if this is the very beginning of a book, I ...