LolitaRose

Thank you for the review! By the way, the reasons as to why Audrey is capture will be in the next part. :) I didn't forget.

Oh, it's just a temporary title. No particular reason, as boring as that explanation is. ^.^; And thank you both for reviewing!

Thank you both for reviewing my work! :D Bah, my eyes tend to skip over things that could be easily changed to fit correctly. For example, tenses. I do have ...

Thank you for your review! :) I knew I did something wrong with the tenses, I just couldn't put my finger on it. Also, yeah, the spelling mistake was my ...

I'm not a regular poetry reader, but here's my opinion: it doesn't seem to flow. It seems kinda...chunky, I guess? Sorry if it's supposed to be that way, or some ...

I like it. Although, I think this story would be better suited for a first person POV. Other than that, not bad! ^.^

The story's pretty good. The only problem I have is that the name is told later on, but that's a personal matter with me. It gives me more of a ...

I like it. Although, yes, your should be you're. I get a feeling that this poem is about being something you're not, and you want to be free of it. ...