LittlePrincess

Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! A short thud filled across filled across doesn't really make sense. You could say spread across or just simply filled and you ...

This was cute. Maybe cute isn't the best adjective but it's the first one that came to mind. I don't really have any critiques, I just liked it. Keep up ...

I read stalking my stalker earlier today and I didn't even realize it was by you xD It was so funny. This story is too, it makes me laugh. Great ...

You say this is a true story? It's actually story of my life. Well somewhat but I know the lonely single feeling a little too well. I liked it, a ...

While this wasn't much of a story I really really liked it. I think that was probably because that is me. Every single aspect of that story is me. It's ...

No she's not, so should I just take it out completley? Should I put something in it's place?

Hey, so good job cleaning it up! There's still a few nitpicks but I'm here to review your plot.. it's very good! You introduce Pat's character very well and some ...

This was great! I don't have much to say as far as edits but I just wanted to pop in and say that I loved this. Keep writing please!

I like it ending there, too, but I don't know how it can. I added more to the end in tell me if you think that's better or worse.

Wow I really really really like this! Your rhymes are very clever and your flow is good. I'm very sorry that this is how you feel about Father's day, but ...

Thank you both and I'm glad you enjoyed it. And Dawn, I actually looked up name meanings when naming my characters although Sophie is to be more ironic. It makes ...

oh i'm glad you liked it :) I agree it is cliche and I would rather stray away from that but it's too late. I'll hopefully get the next part ...