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  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Eyes.

    Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! It's a bit unclear as to what Ivy's disability is. Is it that she can't talk? I think you should make it ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 9:09 pm
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Winter

    Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! Your opening line could be a little more gripping. At this point it didn't really stand out for me and you want ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 7:17 pm
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: In Between Sheets

    Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! A short thud filled across filled across doesn't really make sense. You could say spread across or just simply filled and you ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 6:32 pm
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Mirror of Erised

    Harry Potter! Yess! Smack, smack, smack... My feet pounded softly against the floor as I made my way, slouching, down the corridor. The pounding of the feet and the description ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 6:20 pm
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Hesitation

    That was really great! I always secretly believed that Malfoy and Hermione belonged together. I mean, it's perfect and you executed it so well! I would like a tiny bit ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 6:05 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Walk To Remember

    "Remember I told today will be special?" Mary paused to let Sara nod; her head moving like Noddy's. This is probably not something you can help but it sounds a ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 5:48 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Ice Ambassadors: Chapter 1 (Edits!)

    Hey there! I picked this off of the Team Watchmen review list. Go Team! :) I've never really reviewed fantasy before but I'd love to give it a try. Since ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 5:30 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Guilt Remained

    Hey there. Little Princess here for a review! Since this begins in the future and then goes back to the present i'm not really sure if it counts as historical... ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 4:34 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: An Eight-Year-Old's Philosophy

    Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! but Kamil had told her to be silent with that adult sense of urgency that she didn’t quite understand. That's a good ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 4:15 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Gentleman

    Hello! Little Princess, here for a review! I looked out of the window, the dark street outside was lighten only by a struggling lamp. Opening sentence is a little bland, ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 4:00 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re:

    As a huge scary movie fan I am very excited to read this. So, here I go! "Would you like a cup of tea, Darling?" I asked my husband, Introduce ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 3:42 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Don't have one yet

    I tried to run despite the pain in my legs; I just wanted to get away. However, the more I ran the closer the footsteps got. There came a point ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 3:22 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Rum-Runners

    Hello! Little Princess here for a review! The beginning is great, I like how it jumps right into the action and I absolutely love the characterization of Danny. Already I'm ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 3:11 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Without conditions

    Hey there! Little Princess here for a review! «About me,» I said, listening to the words as they made their way out of my mouth, making the optimism they were ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 2:50 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: OS-DBT: Prologue

    Hello! Little Princess here for a review; It was a hazy Tuesday afternoon in the middle of summer. A cool wind blew in off the water, carrying a tangy scent ...

    Sun Aug 28, 2011 2:30 pm


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