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That was so sweet. I loved it! I have to admit though, it was short. Of last year, my senior year of college, I had planned on giving Summer the ...

:shock: Oooh. I see that you put redo, but I haven't read the first one I believe. I like this though. It was a bit short, so it is harder ...

Hey! I liked this chapter. Good job! ^_^ At exactly three o’clock, I went over to the school’s library to meet Jasper. You don't need over in that sentence. There ...

Ok, I thought it was good. It happened awfully fast though. Maybe spread it out a bit? But I liked it overall. Now onto grammar mistakes. “How am I supposed ...

Hi and welcome to YWS! One of the rules here on YWS is to make sure you do two reviews before you post anything of your own. Since you are ...

I thought this was a good idea and that you should do more with this. One question though. Is this all the first chapter if you are going to write ...

Gah. :shock: You suprised me. Wow. What you said at the beginning made no sense to me. Part of it was in Nate's POV in first person. The middle part ...

HaHa. That end part did sound familiar. ^_^ I glanced at my timetable, Biology was next. The comma there doesn't fit. Maybe change it to a semi colon? It would ...

Hi, and welcome to YWS. As Sakura was saying before, you need to make sure you do two reviews before you post anything of your own. That and many other ...

Meep's do to list #2- Write. Okay, here we go. I cleared my throat nervously, “My name is Melody Petrina Keyes. I was a librarian in Velentia Junior High.” Psst. ...

Aw. Good job. A couple of things I saw: I wanted nothing more, but to miss school today. You can take out that comma. You are only suppose to put ...

Good job beemarie. Just a couple of things... In it she was being chased by a masked man in an alley shouting something she couldn’t decipher and telling her, to ...

Alright beemarie. I liked this, but there were a couple of things I saw. Placing the door closed-or semi closed due to the damage, Remy headed towards the only door ...

Alright here. Some things I saw, so lets get started. There were a lot of spelling typos throughout this whole piece. A good idea is to read over a piece ...

HaHa. Ok, not as much humor in this piece but oh well. I sat down, flustered. Opening my biology textbook, I continued reading up about cell mitosis. One, she continued ...