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Don't be afraid to use adverbs; they are the frosting to a good cake of verbs.

Oh, I see. I did not know that. It's like "colour" as opposed to "color."

Thanks for the review, Gravity. Actually, my mom commented that it sounded like "The Tell-Tale Heart" when she read it and said it was like Edgar Allan Poe's work. Thanks ...

You're awesome! I wish you well, megsug. Thanks for being so open-minded.

Thanks. I finished editing it just now. I'm glad you enjoyed it and am still open to suggestions.

I'll see if I can give the last line a better end rhyme. And I will add some punctuation. You're right. Thanks, Snazzy.

You're welcome. I hope it turns out well.

Correction: iambic pentameter has nothing to do with the rhyme scheme. Though sometimes, iambic pentameter is present with a specific rhyme scheme for a certain breed of poem. However, the ...

Amusing--this put a smile on my face. Good job.

Actually, you're wrong about the form. I already corrected it.

I edited a few things. Thanks for your help, dutifulwriter and WaltzingDreams! I hope this is better now.

You were quite right about those phrases being awkward. I have mended them and will look for others.

Thanks, I'll consider what you said about my overly descriptive wording. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Thanks, I will correct that wording "with arms." Hehe, that was a bad oversight. Thank you for catching it.

Thanks, I had fun writing this; and thanks for reviewing my works and reviewing this before anyone else. You're awesome!