Lini-chan

It was all right, it wasn't bad, but the message is pretty cliche. Try using something that could symbolize what you're trying to say, instead of saying it outright. That ...

I recognized that your poem was a haiku, aka why it was so short, but if you're going to post a haiku post a group of them. Seeing as they're ...

It was kind of hard to read because of the formatting. Especially paragraphing. The story is intriguing so far, but the prologue is a bit cliche. It's a general "girl ...

Like elephantwalrus said, capitalize the I's. It makes it look kind of odd when everything else is gramatically correct and one letter is never capitalized. If you aren't going to ...

It's a moderately good poem, though not one that keeps my interest for long. Maybe you should describe the girl more(like what makes her so attractive to you), and not ...

I read it, and I thought it was okay...but it could use some improvement. I liked the idea of describing a war zone (which is what I think you were ...

It's a good poem, and descriptive, but there's some things I think could be improved. I don't quite understand this line: Just my paddle and I, the giggling wake behind ...

I enjoyed it quite a lot. You described what a tornado is like quite well (I watch the Weather Channel for pleasure, so I've seen a lot of footage). Wiggy ...