LilyJamey

Hey, Vera, I'm Lily (well, duh) and I'm going to give your first brutalisation critique! :twisted: My comments and nitpickies are in bold. Vesper is 15 fifteen (write out numbers) ...

Hello there! Fine piece you have here. First thing: The piano had been brought there by an older kid that lived in the neighborhood­ during a rowdy party, and chaos ...

Hey, pudin'! I'm Lily, your reviewer for the evening (or morning, depending on where you are). Pleased to meet you. Firstly, it's a relief to see that you practise proper ...

'Lo there! Always looking forward to critiquing your work (because it's always a nice read and there's room for improvement). On to the review! My thoughts, when inside the quotes, ...

As usual, I'll begin with dreaded nitpicks. I picked up some typos and grammatical errors, and my comments are in bold. Cherished will be these final moments I have with ...

'Ello there! I'm Lily, and I'll be your critic for this evening. Now, for the dreaded critiquing: Breaking It Up One of the sentences I didn't really understand:- As I ...

Um, perhaps nobody told you, but you have to do two reviews for each work you post on the site. It's called the 2:1 ratio. Please read the rules for ...

Corrections in bold, comments underlined! Be forewarned: I didn't read the previous reviews. Chapter 1: Why was everyone staring at me? Did I have something on my face? Did I ...

It's exam season, and I really shouldn't be doing this. I've successfully curbed posts for about two weeks now.. but I can't stand it no more! I agree with muffy ...

I've not much time, so I'll be as brief as possible! No comments and chatisements on your grammar or punctuation and stuff. Barney looked up at the stunningly decorated Christmas ...

I 'as gots more!! The Pearl is the "boringest" book I've ever read. The descriptions are flimsy. I can't see the pictures at all. The bombastic words are actually French. ...

Don't worry too much 'bout your grammar, I'll help you fix it. I'm a grammar freak. Chapter one Not human " You're... you're not human!" a dark-haired girl screamed as ...

I thought I should finally stop slacking and start reviewing, so... (This is the first part, i will add the rest later.) I have a dream, but nobody seems to ...

Be warned - I nitpick. A miraculous, bittersweet, extraordinary dream that gripped so tightly to my heart so much so that I could barely breathe any longer. I was entranced, ...

Very guilty now. I've been reading this series for a while now.. And this is my first critique. *hangs head in shame* Now! To work! *snaps on gloves and takes ...