Lil_Pau

This was well...just OK. Neither bad nor good, just OK. It needs some improvement there. As Dr. Jamie Bondage said, it really didn't flow well. Also, try not to repeat ...

One thing I didn't really like about this poem was its kinda threw me off. But I think it's a great piece of work, it's very unique and original. It ...

Aww! I love this! It's so...cute! :) Oh dear, i don't know what else to say...good work!! :)

Very nice. It's kinda rare to find a poem about fairies. :) It needs some improving, but it's still a piece of good work! Keep up! :)

O...I liked the first part, but the second part...well...for me, it sounded really 'harsh' in comparison to the first. I mean...the end wasn't really suitable, it sounded a little 'off'. ...

I agree with was very nice to read, it reminds me of a song written by the Beatles (something like that), but if you were to classify it as a ...

Oh, gosh, what a terrible thing! :( So sorry... This is such a lovely & touching piece of work. Since others have already pointed out your errors, I have nothing ...

This is a beautiful piece. It has a lot of imagery and attactive metaphors. :D The flow is great, and the rhyming is good. I like it! Keep it up! ...

I like this one, it has some imagery, but I think it would be better if you've used some metaphors. Anyway, keep up the work. :D (Don't really trust what ...

Hmm...I think you've done a good job, but the last paragraph is a little confusing... :| for me. I like your use of words. Keep writing! :)

It's greatly emotional, but the errors kinda hindered the flow of the poem (from my view, that is). :? However, it's still a great poem. Keep it up! :D

I totally agree. I can see no faulty lines or mistakes there. You've done a good job with the detailed description of the situation in your story. :D Good luck ...