Leahweird

I seem to be plauged by the same editing problems; typos and commas. &@#$ commas. Anyway thank you so much for catching those. I'm so glad you liked it, and ...

Thank you for your review! I will try and expand my paragraphs in the future. I have terrible difficulty with my pacing, and that might help. I don’t suppose you ...

I like the idea of this poem, but not the exectution. The repitiotion did not work for you in this instance. You have such beautiful imagry going on, though.

I am a huge king Arthur man girl, so of course I had to read this. I think you did a really good job of interpreting the story in your ...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Yes this is part of the fairytale phase I seem to be going through, so it is a retelling. Which one it is will ...

Chrestomanci is the title character of a book series by Dianna Wynn Jones (the late, British Grand Dame of Speculative Fiction). Like the Doctor he is famous for eccentiricity, style, ...

Forgot to mention, the length you have here is good. I personally find it harder to read online, so it's okay to have shorter chapters. SHorter things are also way ...

I'm so glad you like it! I fixed that mistake. I think I tried to edit that line too much and it got jumbled. Also I added another chapter if ...

Oh, and Glitchy is an adverb. It's probably not in the dictionary, but it's a legitimate word to describe how the machine is acting. Yay for colloquial grammar!

I'm glad you like it! I agree with your comments about my pacing. It's one of the things I have problems with on a regular basis. But practice make perfect, ...

I agree that there are some major things wrong with this piece, and most of them stem from the use of first person. It's not my usual style, for obvious ...

Dragongirl, I am thrilled with your comments. I agree with you about the problems in the original fairytale. In my opinion he saved her as much as much as she ...

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I think many of us on here feel the same way. I know I struggle through real life trying to express what I really ...

:) Thank you for catching that! I added some lines that will hopefully clarify things. I'm glad you enjoyed reading.

I just wanted to say, I really liked how the action happening with the dagons mirrored what was going on with the humans. Very interesting.