Lauren2010

O.O Murderer substitute teacher! Wasn't expecting that at all. On to the reviewing... It seems as if this chapter was a tad rushed. Try expanding on things. You wanted to ...

Hello again! Another great chapter. I only found one grammar mistake. He’d been back to the orphanage for almost a year now and now the Price’s were trying to have ...

Another lovely chapter! I feel so bad for Noah and all his bad luck. I'm a bit confused... How old is Tya? I was under the impression that she was ...

O.O Wow. This chapter has some disturbing stuff in it, but it is all real. Very good job of writing it, I was enthralled. Concerning all the info on the ...

A great first chapter! I'm sticking with my feeling that I liked the prologue. It works in this case. And I applaud you for that! It is hard to write ...

Hey! Wow, this was great. I don't usually like prologues, but this was actually pretty good (though I haven't read any more of this story yet). The story is very ...

*jumps up and down* It's back! :) I always liked reading this, and was sad when it stopped coming around. Anyways, on to the review... I enjoyed this chapter. I ...

Nice chapter! You definitely cleared a lot of things up. There are just a few items I would like to address. Once we’d gotten out of the bedroom, we’d made ...

Hey there! I'm Lauren and I'll be your reviewer today. I really liked this! You have a very interesting writing style and it kept me interested. The plot, too, intruigues ...

Woah. I would love to review this, but it is very long. That intimidates a lot of reviewers on YWS. Try breaking it up by chapter (I think I saw ...

Hey there! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today :) First off, I saw a ton of mispellings and grammatical errors. Read through this a couple time and ...

Hello again Another enjoyable chapter! I'm really getting interested in the plot. That's good :) Now on to my nitpicking around... When you describe the room she wakes up in, ...

Hey there! As Evi mentioned, your dialogue grammer could use a bit of sprucing up. But she provided a link for a tutorial so you should be all set there. ...

Hey there! Review time! I really liked this chapter. It's getting into the fantasy aspect of things quickly. Stories that take nine chapters to get into any sort of action ...

I really liked this! I don't care what anyone else says about this topic being overdone or the story not accomplishing anything because its not true. You have given the ...