Lauren2010

O.o So many commas... The prologue, quite intruiguing, but the commas, oh dear. One big misconception about commas is that they must be used, which is entirely untrue. Commmas should ...

Hey there Tomothy_Mayhem. I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today. :) This was a very interesting story to read. I enjoyed the plot of it a lot, and ...

Hey there Forest. I really did enjoy this for the writing and such. It was very intruiging and interested me in finding more about everything. The only problem was that ...

Another nice chapter :) I'm liking the diversity in the guys now. I had been a bit afraid they were all going to be carbon copies of each other. Diversity ...

Hey there! Yay for more guardian dog! :) I really enjoyed this chapter. The explination of the magic is very nice, and you do such a good job at describing ...

Hey questcrewforever! I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today. Prefaces... *cringes* Just another word for a prologue, of which I am not fond. Mostly, because they are very ...

Wow, nice twist there! I was not expecting that at all! And it was worked in well, not in a way that made me groan and want to stop reading. ...

Hey queenofroses, I'm Lauren and I'll be your reviewer today. First things first: This is a pretty interesting concept, just really rough on the writing part. I'm going to point ...

Hey Light_Devil! I really really enjoyed this! The whole concept was very interesting, and a lot of thought must have gone into this. I especially enjoyed everything about the dragon ...

Hey Black Thought! This was great. I love the voice you give your characters, and how the words you use and how you spell them reflects that. It's not confusing ...

Wow this is really good! I enjoyed every bit of it, and want to read more. I only had one thing to point out. To be with people- part of ...

Hello RainStormZ, I'm Lauren and I'll be reviewing for you today. This is very interesting! I like the concept of the Byari, and the two moons, and everything else! You ...

Another good chapter! The fight scene seemed to go on for a long time, like TreeHugger said. It felt like overkill. The only part I think that should have been ...

It was possible that this was also the care, but I had my doubts. case, not care I snorted. Because you have too many questions to ask and that one ...

Great chapter! I really love the budding romantic relationship between Shanna and Riley. You keep it going and interesting without letting it take over. Just be careful it doesn't end ...