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Re: Cross Your Heart (One-shot)
it was William, her ex-boyfriend and her best friend. A) If I'm correct, you should capitalize "it" here because the sentence before it comes to a full stop. B) The ...
Sep 28, 2010 -
Re: Tears of Fruit (Full version)
I noticed a lot of really obvious grammar and spelling issues here: "A Lightning bolt, which was accompanied by an increased number of raindrops the higher the rank." Should lightning ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: The Fall-- До Свидания, Икар
Little nitpicks: "He only knows two things: It’s always snowing. He’ll never get out of it." I feel like there should be an "and" in there, or a numbering of ...
May 16, 2010 -
Re: Confessions of a pissed off teen on suicide watch
Though there were various things I could go after, the other reviewers seem to have caught them for me. What I really want to zoom in on is that, as ...
May 16, 2010
