Kiwisatsuma

Hey there :) As a high school romance I think this is an interesting story. I like that you have a couple of romantic interests instead of just setting one ...

Hey there :) So, this seems like an interesting plot and it was well written. I really wasn't expecting that twist with her going forward in time into her future. ...

Hey :) A funeral is quite an overused topic for a short story, but you made it different and genuinely touching. I liked the way you focused on the personal ...

Gah... *shakes head in amazement* Such an intriguing concept. I am proud to have played a part in inspiring the creation of this work. So many layers of meaning to ...

Hey :) I don't usually review poetry because I can never think of anything worth saying, but I'm going to give it a go. :D Anyway, I liked this. You ...

Hi! Me again. XD Right. So, you'll be pleased to hear, I'm not gonna go on about showing not telling in this review! :D It felt much less rushed and ...

Hey there :) Welcome to YWS! :D So, this is interesting and you have a good plot but you could definitely make some improvements to it. First off, you need ...

Hey there :) Hmm, interesting. This seems like quite an original take on the whole 'running away' idea and it definitely has potential. I'm not sure that it really is ...

Hey there :) Welcome to YWS! :D I like this a lot. It seems like a very interesting beginning to a novel and your descriptions are really good. I would ...

Hey :) I like this a lot. I was really drawn in from the first sentence, you described the setting very vividly and it felt like the main character had ...

Hey :) I like this a lot. You say a lot in a few words without just stating facts. There are a few small things I would maybe adjust to ...

Hey there :) Well, you've certaintly got an interesting plot going on here. I like how you get straight into it as well without dallying around too long. There are ...

Hey there :) Well, it seems like this is setting up for in interesting story but I do think you need to make some changes to improve it. I reach ...

Hey :) I enjoyed reading this. It's well written and I like the character of Tom, from what we've seen of him so far. You do slip into past tense ...

"100 Years of Solitude" by Marquez. Worst book ever written... I'm serious... I hated it, hated reading it, more like trying to force myself to read it. It was just... ...