KitxKat

This is getting very confusing. I think your moving to fast. Your emotions are getting to crazy, and I can't keep track of them. Slow right down. Remember to explain ...

Okay so, most of this chapter seems pretty random and unrealistic. If her parents her really in love, then it'd be at least a couple months before the father even ...

You are moving really fast. Actually, during the first part, you have way too much dialogue and not nearly enough description. Slow it down. Do some describing. Also, Emily seems ...

I am right with you at the poetry thing. Not my thing, but try it anyway. I'm sorry. I don't get the reference in your title. [quote=Sporkpunk]Ramblings of god and ...

Mama, wake up! “Mama, wake up.” Jasmine peered over the handle bars keeping her mama safely tucked in bed. She couldn’t see her Mama’s face good so she pulled the ...

That was a crazy poem. It really played with my imagination, which I loved I’m shooting heroin and really looking forward to my release ^^^ That was the only line ...

The sun was shining so brightly that day and the sky was a bright azure. Wind tossed my hair on my shoulders playfully and it all seemed like a perfectly ...

Basilisks of Bellwood “Now we can do this my way, or the hard way,” Dante boasted, as he brought the man outside. “If anyone is stalking this house, let this ...

~CHAPTER 1. ~ She watch as the train started to leave the station. Tears poured down her face. Her cheeks and nose where rosey red. She put her hand down ...

THE DEATH KISS COVEN “’ I swear , by my meaningless , worthless life , that no matter what kind of peril we may find ourselves in … I will ...

Chapter One: Take a deep breath. Hold it. Hold it. A little bit longer. Almost there. Just a few more seconds. Wait...almost...just a tad longer...and.....let it out. Feels good, right? ...

Chapter One: Welcome To TarponVille High I could feel my heart pounding faster than my feet could hit the ground. A new school year and im already late. Thats what ...

My dreams are haunted by nightmares. Images of terror and despair. I had one a few nights ago, about the world bombing itself, each country turning on the others, fighting ...

Impeccable grammer/spelling. Now a question. How old are David and Dante. I remeber from the first chapter that they are, well, old. So, the speech instance that I quoted doesn't ...

A/N: For those of you who enjoyed and reviewed 'Heal.' (which is a working title) this is a short extract of her first day at school, it's only been edited ...