KingKamor

I'm glad that you liked it, and I'll look forward to future reviews from you!

After rereading that part, I agree that I told more than I showed. Thanks for bringing this to my attention and for the review!

Haha, I kept meaning to fix those typos, but never got around to it. I think that at the beginning he didn't have a name, so I just put "the ...

Yes, that's German that Adele's speaking. Thanks for the review! I'll be sure to take more time to describe the characters themselves even during the action scenes.

Thanks for taking the time to review! A lot of people have been complaining that the third-person present tense isn't really working that well. I'm thinking I should just go ...

Thanks for the review! I'll start going over the sentence structures more thoroughly in future posts. On another note, the main characters aren't actually machines. I think you might get ...

Thanks for the reviews for my chapters! I already know about writing everything in word, though; I've been doing that since I first joined the site. As for the rest ...

Thanks for the review! If you want anything of yours to be reviewed, then please don't hesitate to ask!

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I'm not sure why that wasn't capitalized, but I'll fix it now. And don't worry about not having any criticism; encouragement like this is just as valuable! Thanks for taking ...

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I didn't expect such a quick review. Thanks for taking the time to write this up; I'll take this advice to heart. If you have the time then please read ...

Thank you for reading this. I hope you enjoy the rest that I'll post in the future!

It seemed a little too fast to me. You have good grammar, and it's good as a prologue, I guess, but it couldn't really hold my attention very well.

Wow, thanks for the nitpicking, Ezme! I've actually been waiting for someone to do the whole quote-critique thing for this. And thanks for pointing out a fundamental mistake in my ...