Kim

thank you so much for the time you put in. wow. i appreciate it so much. i will definately take your advice. and make some changes. again thank you kim

i think it is good, it does move fast, but like you said you had written for a school progect. i like the idea that you started with, and then ...

bear this is very very good, i dont think it was to long. there are a few spelling errors, but other then that , this is so well written. the ...

This is beautiful. i normally stay away from poems, i dont have the ability to critique them. but i started this and couldnt stop. you are very good with discriptions ...

Thanks Bear. i changed it. it's those little things i seem to always miss. :D

i like how you have rewritten this, you have added so much more detail. it is getting suspenseful and flows when i read it. i think you have a good ...

i like how you use discription. i laughed when you fell over the gate. you discribed the refugee's so well, i could actually see them. i kind of got lost ...

thanks for letting me know you posted this chapter. i had no idea the story would take this route, i really like it. alot of surprises. cant wait till the ...

Bear , this is awesome again. i am intrigued with this story. it is well written. i cant wait for tthe next chapter. kim

i guess i am not sure where i should have posted this. I am sorry if i put it in the wrong place. Thank you for letting me know. I ...

i think this is great. it is very sad and you show the emotion. you did very well. keep going. kim

i reallly like it, i cant write poetry so i cant critique for you. but i can tell you if i like it lol. you are very good. kim

thanks bear. i will fix the sentence, the angel that kicked Anna demon, was one of the war angels sent to guard the house and seth. i am trying not ...

wow bear, this is awesome. the only thing i found was , in one sentence you used had three times, probably a typo. but that is it. your writing is ...

This is awesome, wow , hurry and post the next chapter. i love this . kim