Kim

that is ok Aero, really. i have learned alot more with these posts. lol. and can see my mistakes. thanks for your comments. i really do appreciate them.

thank you so much angel, i appreciate it. i will definately change things. i like your ideas. kim

angel i really like your idea's , they make a huge difference. i have a tendency to run out of words. thanks so much.

Thanks angel, i really appreciate it. and will go back and make changes. thanks for taking the time to point out what changes i need. very helpful. kim

thanks , snoink aero and angel, your conversations are actually helping me out. i am going to rewrite the first chapter, i can see all three of your points. kim

wow bear, this is awesome, i with cat , this just keeps getting better and better. it looks like cat pretty much got your errors. i am so proud of ...

aero thanks for atleast reading the first two, it is my very first time writing, cant be perfect, i am on here to learn, sorry you couldnt finish it. oh ...

thanks again angel, i am glad you are liking it. and thanks so much for your helpful comments. again i will go back and make some changes. kim

Thanks again angel, i will go back and make some changes, its amazing how even the little things we miss. i appreciate it so much. kim

thanks so much angel, i really appreciate it. kim

thanks bear, i will go back and make some changes. thanks for finding them for me. i really apprectiate it. i am glad you like it! kim

and bear scores again. i like how you write with emotion, just letting the words flow as you feel them. you can over critique yourself and lose some of the ...

this is good, i like the discriptions you use. it was smooth to read. good job. kim

i agree, this is very good, and if you know music, then this would make sense. a bass does roar. you did an awesome job. kim

wow bear, this is awesome. i liked how you got your emotions in this. i see absolutely nothing wrong with this. it is great. kim