Khimera9

I might as well rate it right now. 4.5 stars out of 5 The voice and narration of the story is extremely fluent and much easier to read than others. ...

Okay, that was a weird way of how you put this thing together. If you were trying to lengthen the size of your story then that's a negative. Second, your ...

I read the whole thing and I can only say that it needs to be cleaned up a bit. It seemed to me to be just a pile of sentences ...