Kel

However, what you're doing, from preliminary line 1, --- is slapping your reader in the face with homoxexuality. It's not good to do that. Not just with homosexuality, but with ...

Squallz: Thanks! You can bet there'll be conflicts! Alainna: Thank you! I added in a bit of dialogue to Alex. I'll put it in as soon as I'm done here. ...

Oh geez! That would be my eyes and the alphasmart! Oh, man. I'll fix it!

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I don't like to edit before posting. I want people to see the very raw, basic bones of the story I'm trying to write. If I edit too much, I ...

Thanks, 007. :) I'll have to read through the scene again and see what I can do. I post these directly from my Alphasmart which only lets me view 4 ...

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You guys have to remember, the only time we really see James is in Snape's Worst Memory. You can't judge their entire character on that small little moment. But you ...

[spoiler] I see how James' potrayal makes it difficult to see how Lily would pass up such a devoted friend as Sev, but we do see, in the memories, that ...

[spoiler] I totally wish Lily had chosen Snape! I mean, there's no evidence except that James was an arrogant annoyance, a prankster, and Snape was all sweet and loved Lily ...

Nooooo.... Not "fishes" please, please don't. Yes, fishes. Not changing that part. It fits. It's a real scientific word. You left me hanging here between this post and the next. ...

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Thanks for the tips, ST. The word "companion" only meant that. Like a compatriot, friend. As for the undertones, you're the only one that caught it. But "companion" didn't refer ...

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