Kaylyn

Thanks for the critiques everyone. They really help. By the way Livinginfantasy I love your siggy.

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Yes great flow. It is quite a different writing style. But I like it. You'll definately get an A. Good luck, great job, and keep writing!

thanks, I know what you mean. Its a bit too broad. I need to focus more on one subject.

Thanks, which other one? Oh that one. yeah... Agian thanks bunches. Its nice to hear such positive feedback.:)

Great job and other than the grammar mistakes you did great. you copied myers style hreat. I think that this could even be a section added in to the book. ...

Ai, can anyone move this. I acidentally clicked on the wrong one. Could someone put this in Other Poetry?

Who says there is a next part? wahahaha... *cough* i have been thinkinn about extending the story though.

Thanks for the crit:)

So far, nothing peculiar had happened, which in itself was, well, peculiar. This was the exact thought that Xylon was having the morning that the strangest thing that had ever ...

I tried to read iy, but it started out way to boring for me.

Thanks Cheshire Cat, I really appriciate the critique. :)

I read forests of the Night and all the other books. I loved it. Thanks Dr. Tick Tick. And I have read the Historian. So thanks for that recommedation. I ...

Amazing talent. I could never had done that. great job!!

Wait I just read the latest Artemis Fowl book. Holly or Butler doesn't die. *glares accusingly* you lied.