Kaylyn

Okay I edited it, thanks ya'll for helping me out. You helped me with the mistakes I overlooked and gave me alot of help. I will let you know when ...

I really love your story so far. Let me know when you continue it! Anyways good job on improving your story. Good luck with your future writings!

This is my rough draft. So i would like it if you used the edited and new version of the story, Half-Blood. Thanks for all the help.

Thanks for all the constructive critiques, they really help my writing. I have now edited it so hopefully its alot better now!

Beep. Beep. Even though I heard my alarm, I didn’t even think about getting up. I was not tired, though. I was in that state you get into right after ...

Okay I am going to critique it so here goes, and also make sure you rate it R because you did use very strong language. Stepping out of his cabin, ...

I edited it using the critique that I had off the original. Can anyone please give me some advice, or show me something I left out? I would really like ...

I have to say that your story sounds like the real everyday life of high school. I like it and think has a great plot. Need to work on the ...

I really like the whole story line, I think you need to introduce the characters better, and check your spelling but other than that I can't wait to see what ...