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The rain stopped and the principal, Mr. Nesbitt rounded the corner. After Nesbitt place another comma. This is called appositives, it sets off added information. Does that make sense? “¡Ay ...

This sounds like a great idea! I am loving what you wrote. The grammar is actually pretty good. I didn't' find any common mistakes at all. But I did notice ...

I haven't read the other chapters, but since you have no reviews on this one, I thought I would critique it for you [[: !@#$%^&*( “Gary, say something… Please!” Isabella ...

God ’s simple way of reminding everyone that a new day is risen, that a new day is found and a new beginning is here. So... I'm pretty sure instead ...

Hiya! I'm here to critique your work. I'm loving the title! ____ His ocean, blue, eyes were blood shot, and his lower lip trembled. I think ocean blue is one ...

Welcome to YWS! I'll be easy on you with this piece, (: I always am anyways. Well, let's get to it, shall we? *** Life was simple I went to ...

Hi, I'm here to critique quickly. ________ Oh yea I was badass, and yet here I am. Don't use text talk in your writing, use the yeah with an H. ...

Hey there, I'll be your reviewer since no one has reviewed your work. _________ There were, as I had expected, Goosebumps now plastering the arm, but the shock was great ...

Hi! I'm here to critique your piece, which really looks interesting. Stay put... ___________ ...of the children in the Dining Hall, “All, sit down.” After Dining Hall place a period ...

Hey, I'm going to critique your piece which is like the perfect length. Ha-ha. Anyways, yupp I'll find your mistakes :D ________ When Firecrow, arrived at the Taku Island meeting ...

Hi, I kind of recommend you go over this yourself and at least find some of the grammar or spelling mistakes on your own. Capitalize your eyes, that's something you ...

Bonjour, I'm here to critique your work [: ________ I look over at her and she is beaming, a perfect, toothy smile and lined raspberry lips. You describe this an ...

Bonjour, I am here to critique this very nice sounding piece! [: ______________ “Oh, Okay.” Can I ask why you capitalized okay? ...she was defiantly someone who could pressure you ...

Hi, hi. I'll be your reviewer since I have reviews to catch up on... Well now that that is cleared, let's get to your actual piece. Great idea with your ...

Hi, hi. I'm here to review your piece, it's short so I will probably find little mistakes! [: _________ I get out of my comfy bed, and the floor is ...