Katharsis

Ariorl. Three thousand miles below the Atlantic, size being enough to make Atlantis look like a pea. I really dislike this one sentence thing. It's like you're making a list, ...

Chapter 1: Killer's Rage The gloomy city was almost pitched black 'pitch black' at ten o' clock on a Friday night. Very few windows were lighted 'lighted', while legitimate, doesn't ...

She ran as quickly as she could, but not fast enough. She collapsed onto the ground, the [s]heavy[/s] Heavy is not a necessary word in that sentence, and for me- ...

Think about it, and what you’re trying to say. Currently it feels like a collection of images without a story or reason behind it. They wrap around you, strangling, suffocating, ...

Ok this is my first post on here so don't go to hard on me. Never. It was another long night as Kyle lay back on the gurney, having already ...

Claudette was out in her rose garden with a hand-fork, poking it at the soil below. She had intended to plant some more flowers other than roses. Most likely lavender ...

I found the rhyming to be more distracting than comedic, but it is your poem. It was, like your other one, rather drab to me. The end was alright, but ...

Sometimes it was wet in there, and it was hard to breathe for all the steam. I would replace this with "hard to breathe through all the steam", for, while ...

being roughly [s]2[/s] two the first and [s]4[/s] four the second Numbers are distracting. Up until the number thirteen, it's correct to spell them out. I liked it. Though you ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...

HUMAN NATURE I like the title of it, because it can be taken in several ways. One is that it's "human nature to destroy" and such, the behaviours we exhibit. ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...

I think you have a bunch of unnecessary words that just make the poem clunky. There is a bit of a rhythm going, but it could be better with one ...

[i]perduti Something's wrong there. Either you were putting something in italics, or that's not meant to be there. 30,000 pigs each year, 70,000 goats, 20,000 sheep and 40,000 calves and ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...