Kalliope

Hey there, Demeter! Here's the crit I promised :) [I'm not all that good with non-fiction, though.] Not the most tactless thing to say, and I'm still not sure if ...

Hi there, I haven't got all that much time, but I thought I'd give you a quick review since nobody else has yet. For a first song this is definetly ...

Hi OverEasy, I've been wanting to critique some of your writing for quite some time and I thought starting here may be good. I enjoyed reading these lyrics and other ...

Hi Dreamer, I really enjoyed reading this. The dream is kind of cheesy, but I suspect you were attempting that and the ending was fun. I do have a slight ...

Hi Sam, I absolutely love this. Your wording is colorful and you sent me to the dictionary a various amount of times to look things up, but I always found ...

Hi Adna, I really enjoyed reading this. You have some wonderful images and have created a very sweet poem. I had the same problems with it as Pengu basically. I ...

Hi there :) NOTE: Don't go looking for a meaning in these lyrics; there isn't any. This did not encourage me to read this. Plus I think you really should ...

Whee, this is for the musical you're working on, I take it? *gets excited* I can imagine the secene and I think it'd very well in a musical once you're ...

Hey Choco, I haven't critiqued or written any lyrics in a while, so I'm a bit out of practise, but I thought I'd get back into this business ;) I ...

Hey there, I like your story and you've got some really cute stuff in here, but I also think you need to work on this quite a bit. First of ...

Woah. Ouch. Double ouch that is. Poor Lukas... I really love how you described the scene with the roses and all. This part yet again is just plain awsome. Nevertheless ...

Finally, finally here's your review. :) To take it off him would destroy him . I think it would sound better if you cut out the first 'him'. It would ...

Hey there, I actually enjoyed reading this. You've got me 'half-hooked'. Means I'll probably read the next part ;) I agree about cutting out the profile thing. You need to ...

Hi idle muse, I really enjoyed reading this. It took me a pragraph or two to get used to the piece and there were one ore two phrases that sounded ...

Hi Loose, I really, really liked this :) It was short, but I didn't felt like anything was missing. Interesting way of touching this subject. Sweat was sliding down his ...