Kale

Thanks for all the praise, and I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Thanks for the lovely comments. Glad you enjoyed the poem. Weird and random dreams are the best.

I was just wondering, out of curiosity, was the stream smaller in length or in width? If it were short in length, it wouldn't be a stream. Streams are long, ...

Thanks for the review. Rothur gets described a little later on in the story, namely when he reveals the curse to Emmaline. "Princessly" has the benefit of being an actual ...

This detail is important so that we have a sense of the time lapse between these three scenes. I'm not sure what you're saying about this part? The sun being ...

Thanks for reviewing again. There are quite a few things I disagree with, though: About the long sentence: long sentences are only an issue when they become so long, they ...

Thanks for reviewing. Emmaline's parts will not have any direct dialogue. This is part of the style I'm aiming for, and I'm not likely to change it. A lot of ...

Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this, and I'm really glad I helped you find a different way to go about writing things. :3 Also, you are awesome ...

Thanks for reviewing. This part of the story isn't actually the beginning. It's a little further in, and there's description of the characters in other parts. The lack of dialogue ...

It's still considered good writing practice to keep the terms of reference consistent in the narration itself. The characters can switch between, but the narration switching too is too inconsistent.

I asked for some specific details that you think would be good to include, and instead you start talking about spoilers. Either you meant those details were spoilers, or you ...

...what? You're telling me that I need more details, but at the same time, you're telling me that including those details in earlier parts ruins my own story because they're ...

Are you saying that you've read all the parts posted so far, or just this one?

Thanks for taking the time to review. Unfortunately, your review leaves me wondering if you read the little notice at the top, which explains a bit about how I'm writing ...

Thanks for the review. Description has always been something I tend to be sparse on (except when I'm deliberately trying to include a lot of it), and I'll definitely be ...