Kale

My impression of the first stanza is that you tried too hard to make it rhyme, and that it needs proper punctuation. The lack of the latter obscures the meaning, ...

This poem had such a lovely flow and feel to it, and the line breaks were very well placed. I liked the lack of capitalization and punctuation; it really added ...

There was no flow to this poem, and it felt very disjointed. You also repeated a lot of words and phrases; in a poem as short as this, it comes ...

Hey there. I haven't read any of the other chapters, so if some of my questions have been answered earlier in the story, feel free to disregard them. Before I ...

Hey there. I haven't read the previous chapter, so you might have answered some of my questions in the story already. First thing I'll say: you have a number of ...

Hi there. I'll be reviewing you as thoroughly as I can. Confucianism placed their footprint on China during the times of the Qin dynasty, and along with it, this religion ...

Hi there! Long time, no review. I'm a bit behind on the chapters, but I'm glad you've kept writing this story; I really enjoy reading it. :D I caught a ...

As MeadowLark already mentioned, you punctuation needs work, especially your commas. You were missing a lot of commas, though I did see a couple extra ones and inappropriately used stops. ...

LittlePetRock already mentioned this, but you need paragraphs. Paragraphs make reading so much easier, and considering that a number of people, myself included, tend to review as they go, having ...

I celebrate natured roads with a tinge of Human. What? O_o Was this supposed to not make sense? The way the trees seem to sway to the same music, It’s ...

Hello there. I'll be critiquing you today. :D First things first, your punctuation was inconsistent, and not in a good way. Punctuation exists to make meanings clear and should generally ...

Hello there. I'll be critiquing both versions separately. :D Erithea of the fairest seas , How many hast thou made strangers to thee ? Thou'st always been ever cold -- ...

I'm wondering what is up with the formatting. It made this difficult to read. What did you use to type this up? If you used Notepad, there's an option under ...

Hello there! :D After reading through this, I'm assuming that English isn't your first language? Because of this, I'll be trying to give you some general advice in addition to ...

Harry and Eldern stole stealthily through the shadows , without speaking . When you are stealing through shadows, it's a given that you are being stealthy and silent. Redundancies not ...