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Re: Deleted 13
Darling, darling, this is gorgeous. Your therapy manifests itself in beautiful ways; I guess that's a blessing for the rest of us. I love your first two stanzas. I adore ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: an aestival whisper
Is it possible for me to love you even more than I already do? Why, yes. Yes it is. Ummm. I've been warned to give good reviews or else I ...
Jun 28, 2011 -
Re: Lavoisier's Law
Hmmm. Here I am, helping an author in need. Doubt you need my help, cuz this is lovely, but here we go. First off, I'd watch the dialogue. I'm getting ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: The Final Remembrance
Hey there. I love that you choose this topic to grapple with--it's extremely difficult to write about, because the topic is so morally wrong and sensitive. You've done a good ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: keeping time-contest entry
This won't be such a good review, natch, because I haven't reviewed in ages and ages. Ha. :) Henry kept time in his closet the same way he wrote letters, ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: patterns and peaches
I feel like I haven't reviewed in forever so this will be rusty. Aren't you excited? :) 1. My first reaction upon reading this was something alone the lines of: ...
Apr 25, 2011 -
Re: Generation Y
You'll be fantastic, I'm sure. Reading this, it tends to seem like you're rambling & going on and on a bit, but I read it again imagining someone reading it ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: The Fall
Get excited. 1. Take it out of italics. Please? I feel like if you do that it immediately makes it twice as good, but that might only be because I ...
Mar 21, 2011 -
Re: The lost line the Road
Is this about someone with a mental handicap? I suppose that is my initial interpretation. Mostly based off this line: “Mothafucka ge' out dis street, this our hood G” and ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: Havisham Dancer
Well, my dear, there's been some lovely critique on this--even some critique I did not fully understand! I am not nearly artistic enough for this site--but I'm just going to ...
Mar 2, 2011 -
Re: Deleted 9
I love this. They have not created the adjectives to describe how much I love this. You did a fantastic job of creating new metaphors to describe your love without ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Blazing
I really, really loved this. The first time I read it I didn't entirely understand it, but that's because you have this huge block of figurative language right away. The ...
Feb 16, 2011 -
Re: Love IV (Illumination)
Oh, you. First of all, I have to rave about how incredibly consistent your narrator's voice has been throughout. It's the same dude--and it always sounds like the same dude! ...
Feb 5, 2011 -
Re: L'Hiver Approche (1/3)
This is absolutely gorgeous/stunning/beautiful, but if I went through and told you everything I liked about it, then this review would be longer than the story itself. So. Quickly, then: ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Ephemeral Girl
Ooooo. I like this. Or, to be more exact: I love it when people narrate instead of have dialogue--if that makes sense--and I love how your ephemeral girl talks, then, ...
Jan 14, 2011
