KailaMarie

Sorry this took sort of a while, I've been really busy lately, but I finally found some time. The other one was standing besides the man Glinting in the weak ...

Sorry this took a while to get to. I've been really busy lately, but I'm on vacation now. (: ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ February 15th, 1730 Hereford Household, Kent, England February 15th

She is wearing a nice satin green dress and in her left hand she clutches a cloth doll. There is good discription here, but I would find a better word ...

Here I am! Sorry it took a while, I was really busy this week. This may not be fantasy now, but it will be once I get further in the ...

Lots of things by Sarah Dessen (especially The Truth About Forever, which is probably my favorite), Two Way Street by Lauren Barnholdt (Which is from both the male and femal ...

Nitpicks: That damn nightmare she thought as she toss the covers away and walked over to the window of her bedroom. Why does he keep bother me? He got what ...

“Erik? Why the hell are you calling me at two in the morning?” I wanted to smack him for waking me up. I would take out the "For waking me ...

If I were you I would cut down a whole lot on the intorduction. You don't need to explain all of this, and it was so long, that at first ...

I loved how different this was. It was very repetitive in some places, but it worked because your main character was thinking like that. The feminine features were standing out ...

Hey! First review! Whoo! Haha, hope I can help. First, nitpicks: I laid my head against the cold desk’s top. I would think that should say "desktop" or "desk top" ...

Outside the rusted, iron gate looking into the abandoned manor, I stood and looked up at it. This sentence seemed a little awkward to me, I would try to rephrase ...

Sorry it took me so long to get back to this, I don't check my guestbook thing often, so I just noticed the comments you left. "Are you ready, love?" ...

“You probably have no vagina, then.” “…I’ll kill you.” This and a lot of other lines are really realistic and funny. I could see someone actaully seeing that, too. “…Hey, ...

Overall, I really like the ideas. One thing, though. It seems like she would want to make them leave. I mean it's her old house, wouldn't she be uncomfortable with ...

Oh! I like this plot line a lot so far. I'm very interested, and I'm glad you mad it the guy who was changing for the girl, instead of the ...